今天上午你们班举行了爱心义卖(charity sale)活动,同学们把自制的飞机模型、风筝等手工作品带到操场义卖。本次活动进展顺利,义卖所得款项全部捐给希望工程(Project Hope)。请你以日记的形式记录本次活动的过程,并谈谈活动感受。
要求:
1.紧扣主题,适当发挥;
2.词数80左右;(日记开头已给出,但不计入总词数)
3.日记中不能出现真实姓名和人名。
Thursday, March 12th Sunny
This morning our class had a charity sale on our school
playground.______________________________________________________
Thursday, March 12th Sunny
This morning our class had a charity sale on our school playground. It was really a great success today. Many people came to our fair to buy things. They liked them very much because all these plane models and kites were made by ourselves. We were so excited that our works were liked by those people. And also we were glad to see so many people want to help those children, we gave away all the money that we made to Project Hope. I think we did a great thing and made this day special.
权威解读
这篇文章就事论事,语句流畅。典型的总分总结构,将整个文章脉络清晰地铺开来。really一词的运用为整个文章埋下伏笔,与最后一句交相生辉。excited一词的运用,形象地体现了小作者的写作心态和自豪感。our works were liked by those people...被动语态运用恰当,体现了小作者比较强的语言运用能力。此外,小作者书写认真,也是博得阅读老师喜爱的重要原因。